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is 9% done
Some of the dialogue doesn’t make sense. Some of the sentences are fragments, run ons or overly long sentences. Contradictions in the same paragraph.
The name for the twins is boring.
Lots of telling instead of showing.
— Aug 25, 2026 06:23PM
The name for the twins is boring.
Lots of telling instead of showing.
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