Bailey Georgison’s Reviews > The Works of Vermin > Status Update

the current politcal regime and the upstart counter movement are never defined. What the hell is an extemporist and what is a revivalist and what do they believe in. we'll never know! what is the structure of this society and how does it shape inter-character relations? we'll never know. the characters themselves are badly written and have no memorable features. faceless and interchangeable. very disappointing novel

writing is really good but the main character could DO more yk? Give my guy some agency fr, why does his roommate and boss kind of do everything for him. He's just not as compelling as I would like? Also the other POV drags a little bit. Same issue with Guy, living in her head is just a little dry. The world is super interesting tho, i just wished i liked the eyes we see it through a little bit more than i do

One sentence has 7 commas. I am on page 3.

One sentence had a semi colon, and em-dash, AND a comma. There’s no way you need all of that. I am on page 2

Too many commas. I am one single page in and the editor should have taken out 75% of the commas and told the author to restructure every sentence if they really felt like all of these commas were needed. Oh my god