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Maverynthia
Maverynthia is 17% done
So the plot doesn't seem so bad, however just the way the book is written is...
Aug 10, 2017 12:28PM
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Maverynthia
Maverynthia is 74% done
so we finally geto the part of hte book that the ploth appens at. i think i'm supposed to feal some kind of dread for the character, but i don't.
Oct 16, 2017 12:06PM
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Maverynthia
Maverynthia is 55% done
Spending too much time on a back and forth than revealing more plot.
Sep 21, 2017 02:18PM
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Maverynthia
Maverynthia is 52% done
So it turns out the person that owns the 'kimono' is Korean.. but y'know all Asian cultures are the same.. it's just like how we lump all European cultures together right?

And now there's a forced marriage/rape plot going on because we had to have that in here. WTF is Apex doing?
Sep 14, 2017 06:26AM
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Maverynthia
Maverynthia is 48% done
More stuff happens, still haven't gotten to a plot quite yet.
Also I think the way this 'kimono' is described it's actually a cheongsam.
Sep 08, 2017 07:30PM
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Maverynthia
Maverynthia is 39% done
They author actually put the "HIC"s in the writing for when Annie got hiccups. Please don't do this.

Also more comments about looks.
Aug 30, 2017 12:45PM
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Maverynthia
Maverynthia is 30% done
So what happened to Cayce? What is even going on? I want to say that this book jumps around more than mine does but I at least tried to make mine, make sense and not fill it with babble about sand vampires and Sekou.
Aug 17, 2017 08:21AM
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Maverynthia
Maverynthia is 11% done
So Kerpera is "kiafrican" which is this authors word for black. So it's got some diversity on it... BUT a lot of the time the girls are focused on how they look to guys. It's mentioned that it's part of Mars culture but...

Oh yeah and there's this Facer guy that called his sisters "little bitches" soo... there's...that
Aug 04, 2017 06:34AM
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Maverynthia
Maverynthia is on page 5
This book has way too much jargon. "Mears" replaces "years" as it's on Mars. "Rat-Hab" is some kind of insult. Oh boy the names. However I name my characters weird but Nanoannie....

Oh and we have some "Kiafricans" who are prejudiced against white people. =_ = there better be more of a plot there because you are raising a red flag.
Jul 31, 2017 08:39AM
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