Rachel’s Reviews > Path of Tears > Status Update
Rachel
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Does the author not have an editor? The story has soul (which is why I'm still reading), but there are a LOT of places it could flow better. Fight scenes, for example. There's too much description about where a foot goes, or a hand, or an arm....Give me the juicy bits, make it quick. Fight scenes are fast and fierce. Not bogged down with details - and readers don't want to know every precise limb location.
— Aug 27, 2017 04:38AM
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Rachel
is 81% done
Really starting to like Brental. Great character development, both on his account and Treace's. A little baffled about why he's helping Treace right now, but I'm not complaining!
— Aug 28, 2017 12:07PM
Rachel
is starting
Better 'cliffhangers' at the end of chapters. But, to be honest, I just wanted to read about Treace; I don't care all that much about Brental.
— Aug 27, 2017 04:46AM
