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Gabriel is 5% done
Jan 07, 2018 02:23PM
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Gabriel is 10% done
This book has already broken some of the cardinal rules of storytelling. It started with a dream, and I definitely felt cheated. It's needlessly repetitive -- said dream is summarized by the protagonist immediately after we read it for example. Not to mention most sentence's start with the same word and turn into run-ons. The writer tells and doesn't show and has no sense of what constitutes a chapter.
Jan 08, 2018 08:57PM
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