Harker’s Reviews > Chef Cutegirl > Status Update
Harker
is 66% done
For a book about a cooking show, we're not really seeing a lot of it on the page.
There's also a really defensive tone between the narrator and the reader that, while present before, js really ramping up.
— Jan 11, 2018 03:02PM
There's also a really defensive tone between the narrator and the reader that, while present before, js really ramping up.
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Harker
is 30% done
Oy vey...don't these two know shows like this have cameras in the bedroom? ^^;
— Jan 11, 2018 02:14PM
Harker
is 20% done
Some poor editing is really starting to grate on my nerves. While they're not things that would've been caught by spell check, a decent eye should've seen the at least 4 errors I've counted so far.
— Jan 11, 2018 10:27AM
Harker
is 15% done
The author can't decide what sort of voice they want to give Emily. She seems to go from first time competitor to someone who talks like they've been in this position before. It's conflicting and confusing.
— Jan 11, 2018 09:41AM
Harker
is 13% done
Where's the cooking? She's cutting out all the good stuff. :(
— Jan 11, 2018 09:19AM
Harker
is 4% done
Kind of a stilted writing style. Way too much telling instead of showing. It's like Emily is talking about the experience rather than living it.
— Jan 11, 2018 07:52AM
