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The story is gripping, the characters believable... But it could use some severe editing.
You get another character's action or dialogue often right after the last character's, and the description of actions or sounds could probably be cut in-half. If only it read more smoothly, it'd gain another star or two. The formatting and repetition of words stick out like Foxy in the doorway.
— Jan 15, 2018 08:11PM
You get another character's action or dialogue often right after the last character's, and the description of actions or sounds could probably be cut in-half. If only it read more smoothly, it'd gain another star or two. The formatting and repetition of words stick out like Foxy in the doorway.
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