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Hm something feels off - as i’m reading it it feels like each paragraph they’re doing or discussing something new, it’s jumping all over the place
— Feb 19, 2019 04:21AM
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“What made you leave the army?”
“Thought I’d better settle down, that’s what everyone else was doing. They had girlfriends back home, families, normal jobs. I’m not getting any younger, time I found some peace for myself.”
“You wanted to make peace with your mum first though?”
Maybe it’s the lack of descriptions about the characters before and after dialogue? We have no idea how or what they’re thinking
— Feb 19, 2019 04:25AM
“Thought I’d better settle down, that’s what everyone else was doing. They had girlfriends back home, families, normal jobs. I’m not getting any younger, time I found some peace for myself.”
“You wanted to make peace with your mum first though?”
Maybe it’s the lack of descriptions about the characters before and after dialogue? We have no idea how or what they’re thinking
