Charlotte_xx ’s Reviews > Forgotten Sweethearts > Status Update
Charlotte_xx
is 70% done
It has the promise of a brilliant book.
I find the flow of the story is very choppy, one paragraph their fighting, the next it's two weeks later.
In need of a good edit, some spelling and grammar mistakes, more structure in some sentences.
The story itself is good, however, 70% in and I feel like it's starting to drag.
Update when finished.
— Feb 26, 2019 02:52PM
I find the flow of the story is very choppy, one paragraph their fighting, the next it's two weeks later.
In need of a good edit, some spelling and grammar mistakes, more structure in some sentences.
The story itself is good, however, 70% in and I feel like it's starting to drag.
Update when finished.
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