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Says it all...;-)

:-P
Niggle's pet-peeve-country? ;o)

So far I like the story, just—

...uh oh. Is that good or bad?

Icedave wrote: ":-P
Niggle's pet-peeve-country? ;o)

So far I like the story, just—"

...just...uhu!
If you are complaining about pet peeves I won`t touch it with a ten feet pole...;-)

...hmm...let's just say:

I'm not a fan of his writing style regarding sex-/love scenes and involved body parts (so far)...The worst line was for me in the first scene (marked bold):
“Odis looked down at Bobby’ dick, which stood straight up like a tall, fleshy fireplug.”

The writing style of non-sexual involved things is okay for me (I'd like perhaps less use of adjectives at some parts). And I like the plot so far.

3rd person POV, mostly from Bobby's view, with paragraphs of Odis' view sometimes. I'm not a fan of switching POV's inside scenes/chapters, but (so far) I'm comfortable with the author's POV style and easily recognizing the "interludes" while reading.


...so..let me read further before commenting on this one 0:o)

Simsala wrote: "Icedave wrote: ":-P
Niggle's pet-peeve-country? ;o)

So far I like the story, just—"

...just...uhu!
If you are complaining about pet peeves I won`t touch it with a ten feet pole...;-)"
You're just difficult to please...sometimes... *g*

You're just difficult to please...sometimes... *g*

Yes, very! ;-)

Icedave wrote: "...hmm...let's just say:

I'm not a fan of his writing style regarding sex-/love scenes and involved body parts (so far)...The worst line was for me in the first scene (marked bold):
“Odis looked d..."

Hmm I guess we'll see