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Okay, it's pushing one of my Big Bad buttons: "kids"?? Technically, depending, it might be fine (extended meaning of "child" first recorded as slang 1599, established in informal usage by 1840s), but it sounds much too modern. And annoying.
— Feb 25, 2013 09:42AM
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Brace yourselves.
"...his eyes narrowed and a small wave of veins sprouted through his muscles."
Uncle.
— Feb 27, 2013 09:50AM
"...his eyes narrowed and a small wave of veins sprouted through his muscles."
Uncle.
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"… stood like a wooden statute …"
55% "her open and flowing hair"
*skimskimskim*
— Feb 27, 2013 07:42AM
55% "her open and flowing hair"
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Oh, now there's dialogue tag abuse: "'Out of the question,' Nick swallowed." Ouch. Also? He's talking to himself. Does that a lot.
"A loud clacking sound made Nick jump so bad" - BADLY.
"'This, was definitely,' he panted."
I have, a headache. Gah.
— Feb 26, 2013 09:44AM
"A loud clacking sound made Nick jump so bad" - BADLY.
"'This, was definitely,' he panted."
I have, a headache. Gah.
Tracey
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"solider" for "soldier"
"Whatever Gayle, I'm going"
*sigh*
— Feb 26, 2013 09:39AM
"Whatever Gayle, I'm going"
*sigh*
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Of a cat in a drawing: "In mid-step its powerful, arched back was to the viewer" – and shortly the cat's eyes are described.
And then it goes on to describe how the artist draws light with his pencil. Um. Not the way you're describing, no.
— Feb 26, 2013 09:38AM
And then it goes on to describe how the artist draws light with his pencil. Um. Not the way you're describing, no.