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wtf is going on
so they go to the gym and then a random dude tells the mc he should suck him off and then they all go to the showers and suck-me-off dude and ex-kidnapper-a start making out and ex-kidnapper-b starts crying. like. wtf.
This is either unedited stream of consciousness writing or the author lucid dreaming.
— Aug 02, 2020 01:34PM
so they go to the gym and then a random dude tells the mc he should suck him off and then they all go to the showers and suck-me-off dude and ex-kidnapper-a start making out and ex-kidnapper-b starts crying. like. wtf.
This is either unedited stream of consciousness writing or the author lucid dreaming.
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This story feels kinda surreal. Maybe it's cause there's so much telling as if everything the mc assumes is fact. The sentences feel strung together haphazardly. I don't get a feel for the mc's emotions or cause & effect. Like, the mc only notices some time after breakfast that he's not wearing pants or he gets kidnapped but it's just a prank bro. It reads like a dream. doesn't help that the plot feels nonsensical.
— Aug 02, 2020 01:22PM
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Mar 21, 2021 08:03AM
Lol well take it from somehow who made it through the whole book by skipping multiple scenes, it definitely doesn't get better. It's just kinda weird all the way through and doesn't even capitalize on all the tropes it's employing. Just cut your losses and read more enjoyable porn ;)
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That's definitely good to know! 😂 I considered revisiting this (with a lot of wine) to see if it gets better, so I appreciate you making the sacrifice in my stead 😉😂
