Mike’s Reviews > Persistence of Vision > Status Update

Gah, the infodumps! You couldn't have thought of a subtler way to give the information? Or at least spread the dumps out throughout the book, so this part is less tedious? Also, there's another spelling error - a consul is a position in the Roman empire. I presume that Maggie didn't enter a room with several consuls, lining the walls, with blank screens. The word you're looking for is 'console' - GET IT RIGHT!

Hill? It's called a sensor. It senses things - therefore, it is a sensor. It is NOT a censor - it does not edit out in appropriate content, it senses things. If you make that spelling error one more time, I will throw my Kindle against a wall.

Damn, there's some rough prose here. It's very purple and formal, which isn't necessarily bad, but it leads to some very stiff dialogue and awkward turns of phrase. It's also not without spelling errors - 'sensored' was once spelled 'censored'. And just for kicks:
"[Some dialogue involving the word 'seeing']. He said the word 'seeing' as if it tasted funny."

Let's see... infodumping, infodumping, and oh, look! It's MORE INFODUMPING! It's taken up 4 percent of the book so far, and Maggie still hasn't gotten an answer to the question she asked (why is she here?). Really, you couldn't think of a subtler way to give us all this information? And half of what we've learned doesn't even make sense.

The pacing is so rushed. In the first 7 percent, we've had four rushed, fruitless attempts to create a sense of normality, followed by a mysterious (read: unexplained) event to subvert things. It gets predictable and tired after a while.

This is supposed to be new adult, no? So why are there so many YA paranormal cliches? Seriously, in just three percent of the book, I think I could name about six.

My first NA novel! I'll admit that I only read it because of a request, but I'm sort of glad I'm leaving my comfort zone, especially considering how YA has been disappointing lately.