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Instead, the suspense was already given away, when you mentioned Claire's name(and I guessed right after the call, it should have been Cassandra who is fighting).
— Aug 02, 2013 05:31PM
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Ciara1973
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I don't mind swearing, but this is a little too much. This is suppose to be YA, and they are constantly swearing. Not only in dialoge, also describing how someone fell on her ass (instead of behind).
— Aug 03, 2013 06:17PM
Ciara1973
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When a stranger suddenly shows up, don't write the name of the person. Wait till the person is interduced later.
— Aug 02, 2013 05:27PM
Ciara1973
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This really needs to be edited. The idea is great, but getting Claire and Cass mixed up is not good.
— Aug 02, 2013 05:25PM
