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Elithanathile
is 31% done
// The author needs to fine-tune her transitions as well ... you can’t be at the house one minute and at the studio the next … Show us, the readers, the drive to and from somewhere so they can have a little bit of conversation, and stop fucking paraphrasing and summarizing everything ... show us the conversation, let us see the developing relationship and friendship!!
— Mar 14, 2021 08:52AM
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Elithanathile’s Previous Updates
Elithanathile
is 34% done
// Annnnnnnnnnd this author lost me completely! Done with the other and done with the book … Such bullshit!!
— Mar 14, 2021 09:35AM
Elithanathile
is 31% done
// The deeper we head into this story/book the more it’s clear that this author is new to writing and that this novel is her debut novel!
— Mar 14, 2021 08:54AM
Elithanathile
is 31% done
// As great as this book has been so far I’m not very pleased with some parts in that it’s telling or paraphrasing in retrospect! I want to see see see see!! I want to see it happening in real time, I don’t want the author telling me about it, so author, kindly butt out, and show me!!
— Mar 14, 2021 08:42AM
Elithanathile
is 17% done
// We’re veering into “telling too much; not showing enough” territory! I don’t think that will be the case, but the author better beware! Also, instead of saying “winking face emoji”, how about just putting that emoji into the text? Some authors do that and it’s a fantastic decision, which this author specifically should follow suit on!
— Mar 14, 2021 07:28AM
Elithanathile
is 17% done
// This author better not be one of those authors that turns all the female characters into massive raging cunts!! Admittedly lots of women are that way, but it would be nice to have some good and decent and kind and sweet female characters as well!!
— Mar 14, 2021 07:23AM
