T.J.’s Reviews > Return of the Crimson Guard > Status Update

There have been several spots where the text has really broken the flow for me. Some spots where it is hard to tell who is talking, some downright clunky grammar at times, still... ICE's writing seems to have gotten better since his debut and the story is interesting and has great momentum, except for the aforementioned clunky spots that some better editing or formatting could have fixed.