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I am cringing over the mans painting metaphors and metaphors in general. No one, but no one uses metaphors as frequently as these detectives
— Nov 13, 2021 04:04PM
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Wendy
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I found some of the dialogue choppy in the beginning.
The author's habit of her characters' explaining a pun is a pun is irritating. The Reader is not stupid & it detracts from the dialogue. If the pun is suppose to demand a reaction, let there be a reaction.
One of the characters calls his partner their Department nickname - then it is reiterated he too uses the nickname. Well, Duh, a needless addition.
— Nov 13, 2021 12:51AM
The author's habit of her characters' explaining a pun is a pun is irritating. The Reader is not stupid & it detracts from the dialogue. If the pun is suppose to demand a reaction, let there be a reaction.
One of the characters calls his partner their Department nickname - then it is reiterated he too uses the nickname. Well, Duh, a needless addition.
