Tammy’s Reviews > The Octunnumi Fosbit Files Prologue > Status Update

So I’m the midst of an all out war we now have a boxing match if the twins…. Totally fucking random. And how is this needed?

The fact that the author just inserts himself as the narrator….. o.O

So this character Veebee was supposedly removed and then shows up and their mom has kept her after being told to get rid of her and everyone knows who she is and acts like she’s been around forever. Consistency matters on a book.

Also. Trad, the character is often extremely clueless about his own world even Antagonistic when he knows what is going to happen which seems unreasonable for some who’s “regenerated” multiple time and lived multiple lifetimes.
The book seems disjointed also which is hard.

So. This book has a great premise and great world building but I’m struggling a bit with the two main characters. Twins. Who can talk to each other in their minds. Supposedly know everything about each other but no idea what the other is doing.