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Kimberly
is 32% done
Story is good -- opening chapter with Kyle pretty raw. Should have included peek into the 1st year after to understand Ari's freak out near other males. Too, too may grammatical errors. Wish people would learn how to use commas or simply not use run-on sentences. Editing needed throughout.
— Oct 10, 2014 04:53AM
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Kimberly
is 52% done
Lack of punctuation still prevalent, bothersome!!! Story line is good, too bad grammar is distracting and pulls one's attention from the story to the miswritten words.
— Oct 11, 2014 04:38AM
