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I'm slowly getting into it. The dialogue though... at one point the main character (a girl in her 20s I think?) is chasing after someone and yells "Stop, stop I say!" ...........

Hmm… this is actually kinda bad. I’m not a fan of the writing, and why does the American character pause to tell us, the reader, what British words mean? You seriously think a reader can’t naturally guess the meaning of “fit” or “mate”? Is this is a joke?

This author really likes to explain actions: “I slurped my beer to lower the level.” Ok…