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Holly
is 23% done
The plot is ok I guess, but it’s definitely very confusing with all of the names of people and places and gods/not gods and nicknames. This author is very much a “tell, not show” kind of writer.
“There had been something in the creature's voice. A certainty that [XYZ] couldn't shake.” So now XYZ just decided to trust the random searing light telling him something he doesn’t want to hear?
— Aug 14, 2022 10:01AM
“There had been something in the creature's voice. A certainty that [XYZ] couldn't shake.” So now XYZ just decided to trust the random searing light telling him something he doesn’t want to hear?
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Holly
is 36% done
“The structure was… unremarkable as every other building in the city. Even so, this one felt important.”
“He wasn’t sure how he knew, but protected Essence- such as that contained within his body- should be safe.”
This author really, really, really needs to have his editor teach him to show, not tell.
— Aug 14, 2022 06:15PM
“He wasn’t sure how he knew, but protected Essence- such as that contained within his body- should be safe.”
This author really, really, really needs to have his editor teach him to show, not tell.
Holly
is 26% done
Everyone keeps knocked out and then they wake up dazed and confused, but not concussed or with any brain injuries.
— Aug 14, 2022 10:40AM
