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Kelly
is 11% done
Some of the wording and sentence structure is… off. Some sentences just don’t make sense and some are wordy without needing to be, like run on sentences. Also, some punctuation is just placed incorrectly. The punctuation problems take me out of the story because of how commas are placed. It seems to need another round with editing.
— Sep 16, 2022 10:23AM
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Kelly
is 66% done
Oh. My. Goodness! The use of commas in almost every sentence is driving me crazy and it makes sentences so convoluted sometimes.
— Sep 19, 2022 12:20PM
