Shadow Jubilee’s Reviews > With This Ring > Status Update

ah-ha. Pedro is autistic. Why make him autistic if you're not going to show him as autistic? Show, don't tell!

Soo, looks like we get present time one chapter, flashback the next. Not cool, author.

Ok. Pedro the nephew. What's wrong with him? No lines, no description, nada.

Huh? At what point of the story am I? Chapter Transition scene - not that great. Not feeling the characters and the story. No connection. Flashbacks don't help.