Shadow Jubilee’s Reviews > With This Ring > Status Update
Shadow Jubilee
is 42% done
ah-ha. Pedro is autistic. Why make him autistic if you're not going to show him as autistic? Show, don't tell!
— Mar 24, 2011 09:11PM
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Shadow Jubilee
is 36% done
Soo, looks like we get present time one chapter, flashback the next. Not cool, author.
— Mar 24, 2011 09:07PM
Shadow Jubilee
is 35% done
Ok. Pedro the nephew. What's wrong with him? No lines, no description, nada.
— Mar 24, 2011 09:06PM
Shadow Jubilee
is 31% done
Huh? At what point of the story am I? Chapter Transition scene - not that great. Not feeling the characters and the story. No connection. Flashbacks don't help.
— Mar 24, 2011 08:51PM
