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Fiber optic cabling dangled down, like lacerated sinew from the edges of a ragged wound, cut through what would have been another false sky ceiling of Hydro World.

Cool line!
Also Jason's back, as a jerk monster. Boo!
Nov 07, 2022 10:37PM
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Funny line:

“What?” Lauren almost screamed at Sara, spinning around to face her. “What did you think was going to happen here? I let him go, and he reforms his ways. Maybe, settle down with a missus fish monster and have little fishy babies and a white picket fence here in hell’s flooded basement!”

Also Lauren appears to be growing more ruthless
Nov 08, 2022 09:23PM
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Rob The Reader
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Aww I wanted more of this Kaiju fight between Leviathan and Cheetenoose. One paragraph is robbery.
Nov 08, 2022 08:53PM
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Cool development!

her irises had transformed into an unnaturally bright silver, her pupils reformed into a peculiar diamond shape. Unlike the slits of a cat’s eye—Lauren’s pupils retained a rigid diamond shape as they expanded and collapsed into crosses when they contracted
Nov 08, 2022 08:35PM
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The progenitor as a character had potential but the execution wasn't quite pulled off. The slight missteps here land a wrong note, but thankfully it doesn't last long.
Nov 08, 2022 08:18PM
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I liked this moment with the jade ghosts.

They glided silently around, just under the water, giving the lake a look of having globes of glowing green light, meandering off in the distance.
Nov 08, 2022 06:54PM
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From a storytelling and psychological perspective, the chapter where Lauren meets the 'monster' in the cherry blossom stream is by far the most interesting character work Lauren has displayed.
Nov 07, 2022 11:15PM
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Lunar is a most unexpected character in this book but I found him refreshing compared to Lauren. I hope we see more of him.
Nov 07, 2022 11:03PM
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Following the whirlpool sequence, which was pretty cool, I found this great line.

“Lad, why must you emotionally assassinate us every time we catch a break?” Jack asked.

The humour doesn't always work but every now and them there's a line that sparkles.
Nov 02, 2022 11:07PM
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That sequence with the Pool abomination was tense and exciting!
Nov 02, 2022 10:29PM
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Hahahaha I love this sequence!

In fact, more fleshy stalks noisily erupted from the thing’s open skull, made from what used to be brains, topped with even more vicious-looking lamprey mouths... “We here at Hydro World apologize for this inconvenience,” the Leviathan system said in oblivious sincere ton
Nov 02, 2022 10:28PM
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