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Kayla is on page 118 of 198

Took a few days break from this and I just don’t know. I’m not confident this gets better. I wish he had sprung for an editor, because a lot of this isn’t making sense and it really could have been a lot more with more time and/or an editor’s involvement. I almost want to rewrite this myself as a practice exercise and also satisfaction with the story.

— Jan 06, 2023 10:09AM

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Kayla is on page 111 of 198

In all, the story is okay. It’s just messy and all over the place. It’s hard to follow because the tense and point of view changes. It goes from present to past, first to third to second person without any other indication of which parties are speaking. A new character was introduced without ever being formally acknowledged so you were just running on assumption. But I am mostly following the story.

— Jan 03, 2023 02:02PM

Kayla is on page 84 of 198

You know in zootopia where Judy is knocking her head against the desk saying “I am a real cop” to herself over and over again?

I’m feeling like that.

— Jan 02, 2023 10:23PM

Kayla is on page 27 of 198

I’m never gonna be the same after seeing the way Mr. Leone spelled “cognizant.”

I can’t really excuse this. You just have to Google it.

Cognoscente 🤦🏻‍♀️🫠😵

— Jan 02, 2023 09:04PM

Kayla is on page 24 of 198

— Jan 02, 2023 07:36PM

Kayla is on page 2 of 198

Okay, Matthew definitely would have benefitted from an editor. Sad. I will still finish though!

— Dec 26, 2022 03:53PM

Kayla is starting

10 years later I’m gonna do this, here we go!

— Dec 26, 2022 03:39PM