Mel’s Reviews > The Introspective Debate of Owen Brody > Status Update
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I'm really liking the potential of this, but I don't get who's talking to who and what's happening half of the time. The paragraphs are separated where they shouldn't be (mid monologue) and attached when there's a jump from one scene to another. It takes me out of an otherwise good story.
— Apr 28, 2011 11:56PM
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Mel
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Brody, stop your (unintentional?) flirting with Mia, goddamnit!
— Apr 29, 2011 08:36PM
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Brody was something of an accessory; people invited him, he came, and that was the extent of his interaction. Kehkehkeh. I love this already! :)
— Apr 28, 2011 10:32AM
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People, help me out here: hoe old is somebody in the 9th grade supposed to be?
— Apr 28, 2011 10:04AM
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Apr 29, 2011 12:14AM
It did that to me too Mel...It was still worth it
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Okay good, I thought it was just me :)
