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Sarah
is 38% done
Frequent sexual moments that feel completely out of context. You're in potential mortal danger and you're thinking about someone's crotch against your butt? Semi colon misuse and a misspelling of "Dursely (sic)" also quite grating.
— Apr 27, 2023 01:41AM
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Sarah
is 21% done
So far, eh. Compared to The Disappearance of Draco Malfoy and DMATMOBIL, the writing is really subpar.
A lot of clunky passages, heavily reliant on telling rather than showing. Hate the use of present tense.
Plot I'm enjoying well enough but not the execution.
— Apr 26, 2023 03:46AM
A lot of clunky passages, heavily reliant on telling rather than showing. Hate the use of present tense.
Plot I'm enjoying well enough but not the execution.
