I'mogén’s Reviews > Flight of Life > Status Update

Oh and differnt trails of conversation seems to abruptly stop or are disregarded as a new topic begins. It just sounds like everyone is being rude to each other...

SPOILER!! I honestly thought that they realized the headquaters was where the portal is... Isn't that what they hinted at before? Also, being picky but there are so many god damn typos, missing words/letters etc, in this...

Calloway doesn't need to explain the bully situation to every one he talks to, or at least the author could cut it out for us. Plus the constant pointing out that he, himself, is poor is sounding incredibly annoying & that you should pity him, though he's being "humble".

Still early days yet, but so far the only good page was the first.. All the characters are flat as paper and unrealistic in the way they talk. Calloway's name is used way too much.. I KNOW WHO YOU ARE TALKING ABOUT GAAAWD.