Airwreckah’s Reviews > Song of the Goddess > Status Update

Interesting concept, but the number of grammatical errors is very distracting, as is the use of colloquialisms in weird places.

Interesting premise, but clearly a first writing effort. It needs some editing (homophones) and the dialogue is stilted. There is, so far, a little too much glossing over action with summary. And crossbows use bolts, not arrows.