J’s Reviews > The Mirror Empire > Status Update
J
is 8% done
"He heard someone swear and stab out in the darkness at some flailing thing." Two of those things are visual and it's implied that the character cannot see what's happening in the shadow. The author seems to have a problem differentiating close third person and an omnipotent narrator. This sort of thing is confusing to read.
— Aug 31, 2015 11:45AM
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J
is 20% done
It's a little better, though the perspective-switching is still unclear, and lots of character names to remember
— Sep 06, 2015 10:59AM
J
is 5% done
Not promising thus far. The transition from one event to another is unclear and no sense of emotional depth to character reactions. Hoping it will improve
— Aug 31, 2015 10:05AM
