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Angela Von Takach
is 9% done
“Besides, I never heard of tears bringing anyone back. You?
Um….
Exactly. So why bother?”
I’m not a fan of this particular flavour of fourth wall breaking, it feels so stilted to me
— Jun 08, 2024 10:53PM
Um….
Exactly. So why bother?”
I’m not a fan of this particular flavour of fourth wall breaking, it feels so stilted to me
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Angela Von Takach
is 50% done
This character is eating a muffin. This book needs to calm down
“a soft moan escaped her lips as her eyes rolled back in her head, and an expression of pure bliss overtook her face.”
— Jun 08, 2024 11:45PM
“a soft moan escaped her lips as her eyes rolled back in her head, and an expression of pure bliss overtook her face.”
Angela Von Takach
is 40% done
I think if you’re going to have 1st person narrators talk about happy they and the other character have had “snappy banter”, you probably want to make sure the dialogue you’ve been written is better than this book’s
— Jun 08, 2024 11:36PM
Angela Von Takach
is 21% done
I feel like I’m committed to finishing this book because I accidentally marked it as Read and it won’t let me delete that but…
“…my dick hadn’t got the message. It had been interested. Fortunately, the head attached to my shoulders was always in control and money took precedence over pussy.”
Ew?
— Jun 08, 2024 11:10PM
“…my dick hadn’t got the message. It had been interested. Fortunately, the head attached to my shoulders was always in control and money took precedence over pussy.”
Ew?
Angela Von Takach
is 4% done
So far this book has a severe case of expositional dialogue “this is the situation we find ourselves in” “yes it is and here is the background for that, as you know”
Like that thing in movies where people address one another as neighbour or cousin or whatever so you know who they are
— Jun 08, 2024 10:41PM
Like that thing in movies where people address one another as neighbour or cousin or whatever so you know who they are

