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Still at 27% 'Yea. She had her baby, though I didn't know that until she emailed me a few weeks later, after she didn't how up for our third meeting...' (carries n for two pages non-stop) I honestly can't work out if this IS supposed to be Brian or is it Carrie?? Because the next part - which I THINK is Carrie- makes no sense at all.....

Oh god. Formatting all over the place again. And then this: (And this is the guy) 'Like, I would need daisy love, you know, pretty love, sweet love that nonetheless was ubiquitous in roadside ditches in the summertime, and instead I would get orchid love.' (there are no words to express my feelings at that sentence)

I stop walking, my middle suddenly insubstantial.

'Carrier' - is that a typo or deliberate? I am really struggling with this. Carrie reads like a love-sick teenager instead of a woman who must be - what - late 20s at least.

Hmm, Formatting 'off' in places which makes it harder to read. No spaces between 'messages'

This is all over the place. One moment its 4 am and Carrie is in bed and then without a break she seems to be in the teen collections at the library while Shelley is reconciling her circulation report.

3% in. and struggling. == Shelley is my colleague at the Metropolitan Library, where I’m happy, where I love the kingdom of teen collections over which I reign, except today, when in the middle of everything, I wasn’t.’ ??

page 1. Blond, beautifully made, and I can tell, even though the pictures were taken under bad lighting with a shaky hand. -- Can tell WHAT????