Sharon’s Reviews > For Sale in Palm Springs > Status Update

64 percent done. Oh dear.

I'm 55 percent done ... and I really wish someone would teach this author how to use commas and subordinate clauses. It bugs me no end, because the story would be good if it were written properly. :-/

Oh dear. Run-on sentences, poorly constructed clauses ("she came around the corner with red hair wearing a green pantsuit" is just one example), a sick chimney (it has a flu instead of a flue), an FBI profiler who doesn't know the difference between pedophilia and ephebophilia -- and my latest pet peeve, people who say "Ok" instead of "Okay." Argh.