Status Updates From The Cemetery Murders (Alice...

There's a huge difference between a pinch hitter and a switch hitter. If you don't know what it is, don't use those terms.

I've made it this far, but this is not good. Lots of detailed history about Davenport, Iowa, but just constant repetition of the same facts regarding the murders. Though told from two POVs, none of the voices are distinct. Can't tell one from the other. Lots of historical name dropping without any real detecting. Author should maybe stick to scraping the Internet for nonfiction and forget fiction.

WHAT CAR? They went to see the police matron, then to the bawdy house to interview the "sex workers." At no time was there mention that they were riding in or driving a "car." Motorcar? Automobile?

And just where did they keep this ice cream?

"To die for" is late 20th century idiom. Any sense of 1906 setting has been utterly and completely destroyed. Epic fail.

Oh, and "panties" in first mentioned in 1908. If you are going to write historical fiction, even just a cozy murder mystery, do some research, please. It was nice to see Fergus Hume mentioned, but it takes more than that.

Do you know how easy it is to research the origin of the term "sex worker"? Google it, my friend. Coined in 1978, a mere 72 years after this story takes place.

Someone needs to learn how to write dialogue. Fewer paragraphs, please.