Status Updates From Grit

There is a little flow iuuse, and the characters change personalities quickly. It reads choppy. Not liking Red (or Phoenix, Nix, Dillon, whatever you want to call her).

Its good so far but I am not feeling the main characters connection. She is like a little child as everything is no, no, no. The author makes some interesting word choices; almost like she searched a thesaurus to change out more common words, some just don't work in the sentence.

Things are not looking good for Nix.

God J I so clueless sometimes. I love him!

Omg. These two are a mess

J has no filter at all. Sometimes he needs to not say what he says. Good lord. Lol.

Lol. I can't with Jaeger. He's an ass but he's assness (not a word I know) is growing on me.

Uh oh. That's not good. Red is in trouble!