Status Updates From Please Come Home for Christmas

Waiting to finish this...

One paragraph ends with the pair tucking the children in bed, next sentence starts with them going wild at it. What a woozy!

So, dialogue has been completely forgotten, replaced by a grammatically incorrect story telling.

A bit too much telling and not enough actual interaction and dialogue.

I honestly don't get it. I'm gonna be pissed if this ends the way I think it will.

How? I'm lost. How long will I be lost?

So freaking hot Derek.