Status Updates From The Seven (The Oloris Serie...

"The two continued striking and defending each OTHER's attacks, their skill with the sword matching the OTHER as they danced around each OTHER, neither able to gain the upper hand. Finally, their swords met, and an array of sparks danced in the air between them as the two gritted their teeth at the OTHER."

Wonder if there was any OTHER way to write this paragraph...

Yep, the editor definitely fell asleep. "Immediately" is used five times on this single page. It's used at least once on every page starting at 353. That's, what, 13 "immediately" mentions within 8 pages?

"This is the most beautiful thing I've ever seen," Girl says.
"Yes, it is," Boy says while staring at Girl.

Cue vomit. I am so over this book

Ah, I think we've made it to the part of the book where the editor fell asleep. Missing words here and there, name changes, claiming characters said something when they didn't make a peep. "Griffin's final words," you say? Griffin didn't talk at all in the last scene. It was all Onyx, but sure, Griffin said something too

Who is Gale??? Three people were mentioned--Julian, Manus, and Josiah. Suddenly a Gale pops out of the woodworks, says a line, and then disappears. Never mentioned again. Is this another Eastmund/Eastman situation? Will the real Gale please stand up!

Y'know, the book is centered on elemental users. I was hoping for some Avatar goodness but there is so little mention of their abilities I wonder if they even need them. They could be just regular people instead of "Enhanced" and nothing would change. There's no action in this long winded info dump

So there's been no action whatsoever. I thought with the mention of highly dangerous sea serpents that we would get to see some great fights, see the kids working together. Nope. Still a whole lotta nothing

Also adding: 9 out of 10 feminine names end in A. That's way too much. And the names that don't end in A still may as well; for example, Farah. It's like the H was added after thinking "Oh yeah there are a lot of As!"
When your cast is already this big, and the personalities so similar, this is a real problem.

"Small bursts of flames shot around the room with precise precision." Ah yes, that precise precision is so wonderful. I'd also like to add that the best way to convince adults that you're not a child is by throwing a tantrum... oh wait...

Y'all ever hear of "noosing" an arrow? "Rapidly noose and shoot her arrows." I've heard of "nocking" arrows. Is she going all cowboy and flinging a rope over the arrows? Is she trying to hang them? Noose an arrow... hmm...

Hey guys, did you know that being the only son among seven sisters makes you sensitive? Obviously having seven sisters will teach you empathy

This book is definitely going to take me a while to get through. SO much information dumping. But it also has potential.

There are so many characters. So. Many. Characters.

... I don’t even know what to say. This has sooo much potential...buuuut the author’s style seems poor.

Sometimes I wonder about the quality of editing. "Sizzckness" is one I'm still trying to puzzle out. Done on purpose or not? And poor Eastmund becomes Eastman and then back again

//heavy sigh Reading this is truly tiring. Again, too much of information and it’s overly predictable right now.

It gets better! Plot-wise. And I think I slowly adjust to the style of narration.

The ceremony on the day of nations seems odd. I don’t know, it feels like this had to be done, so the new 7 are introduced. Hm...