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Ok, now the gang leader, Rico, has miraculously come back to life? He was just killed in the last chapter…

Author….pull this and edit it now!!!! This has so many major discrepancies, it is hard to read. I should just DNF 🙄

Now we are hearing about a childhood trauma again. The MCs had a candid conversation about this in the previous chapter….

There are so many inconsistencies. The timeline is out of whack. The cells the inmates are supposedly inhabiting and who they share with keeps changing. People were at an event but then they talk about how they heard about it instead, in the same chapter. And their first intimate scene was so confusing. Like, it came out of nowhere. 🤷🏼‍♀️

Note to author: you need to do some major editing. Chapters one and two are a retelling of the same events told by each MMC….but they are extremely different. Like huh? Dante states Adrian comes into the chow hall at lunch and sits at the wrong table, so he goes and fetches him. Adrian states he doesn’t get chow until dinner time and he approaches Dante’s table and asks to sit.

Note to author: the use of “flashback” and “end flashback” in chapter 9 is unnecessary.
I’m about ready to DNF. There is zero chemistry between the characters. They aren’t even rivals. The nerds intense hatred towards the other is just stupid.

Note to author: there are some lines at the very end of chapter 3 that are a convo between you and your editor, I am assuming. Hope this isn’t repeated throughout the book.

Finished Happy Krampus Xmas.
I love Lori! This is a novella about him trying to get his initiation into the family. Every time he finds a donator, something happens spoiling his kill. He blames it on Krampus. He and Ollie used an Ouija board when they were 10 to summon him and every December since, he has had crazy things happen to him. So he comes up with a plan to summon him again and ask him to remove the curse.

if I have to read the word anyhoo again, I will scream. Also, him stating that he said “a word the coach doesn’t approve of” instead of just saying the fucking word is ridiculous. It’s already been repeated multiple times 😤🤬

Pretty boring. And just learned this is 3 books in one 🙄 probs gonna DNF