Darlene Barrett > Recent Status Updates

Cannot finish. In addition to continual misuse of simple words. It appears some parts of the mss were randomly removed and inserted elsewhere. People in a vehicle suddenly at home, etc. Sloppy writing, loose plot, wanders off on tangents. Do not recommend.

"Baited breath". Good grief. Full of misused words.

Interesting oversight in that the guest investors did not have an overnight plan for food, rest, shelter.

Ground repeatedly referred to as "floor". Floor is a man made structure.

Confusing " bow " and "arrow". Writing as well as storytelling deteriorating more.

Spelling and or wrong words again.

Another "down in Seattle" from Oregon. Would discard this book, but curious to see how much worse it gets.

Lots of trouble turning pages without going blank or skipping several.

Hit the "breaks" (truck). Bad, bad.

Am finding protagonist unlikable.

Driving exact wrong direction to Seattle, south from Oregon. This kind of careless writing would have me toss the book usually. Gotta see how much worse it gets.

Protagonist wearing pack should have been left in car at first meeting.

Behavior overdone.

Asides to reader spoil story.

Slow, boring start.

Dog changes from golden to lab. Sloppy writing.

A writer/philosopher wannabe overly enamoured by the sound of his own voice.

Dropping this. Too silly, little attention to detail. "My employee" too many times, too much to mention.

Here the bad guy drives his Civic. Every other time his vehicle is mentioned, it is a truck. Rather spoiled the story

Why is the sun setting in the ocean on the east coast? The protagonist is not on an island.

At 23%, characters still introduced too rapidly. Makes one feel like an unwelcome visitor. Story otherwise ok.

Early on, way too many characters introduced. Very confusing.

Oops... This writer just made a factual error in assuming where a horse's hocks are. Confusing to go from deep snow to that apparently only a few inches deep.

Too over the top to finish; too many errors, both typographical and factual.