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Another clunky sentence:
"The grief and pain that he had done nothing to stop it, even though he didn't know how."

This book is so tongue-in-cheek, I'm eating it uppp

idk if I've read anything worse than this:
"Normally, no one broke the rules.
But not this time."
Simple fix: "Normally, everyone followed the rules. But not this time." Or: "Normally, no one broke the rules. But this time was different." Or literally anything other than what was actually published, because that is such a clunky sentence.

It seemed odd to her that he would study the very religion he found so oppressive.
so many people do, when you think about it - Muslim, Mormon, and independent fundamentalist women all study the books/teaching/dogma that oppress them. Or women with internalized misogyny who believe what they've been taught about women's inferiority, though that's society not a religion.