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I am not sure I can finish this....

Too many emotions!

I am SO excited for this book!!! I was hoping these two would get their own story!!! Eeeeh!!!!!

Um, I think we just switched from third person POV to first....

Okay, I get it, she's androgynous! It's been said no less than FOUR times! In what, 3 chapters?? And 3 of those times were in the last 2 pages. Yeah....

Um, why does she want to sleep with every guy that doesn't try to kill her?? That's more than a little weird. Also, mixing this much horniness with the fight to survive...well, it doesn't mix. At all.

I have to be honest, the writing feels a little...juvenile? Like it's not well-thought out.

Michael Phelps? You really named a character after an Olympian? I know you're British, NW, but really? You didn't realize that your subconscious didn't make up that name??

Damn, I thought for sure the pineapple was it!!!

Okay, the whole getting-names-wrong thing? Olivia just temporarily became Miranda! Who the f*ck is Miranda?? No one in this book even has that name! The words 'get an editor' are beginning to cease to have meaning to me, because I have said them so damn much.

Okay, I love that self-published/indie books are becoming more normal, and I love having access to them. But...GET AN EDITOR! They are awesome! And your readers will appreciate it. NW has dropped the ball twice on names. Once, Harper became Olivia, and now Olivia has become Gina. If you can't keep your names straight, then I don't want to keep reading. Sorry...?

Yep, Alessi's eyes are blue again. Good job, Cameron. Why is your writing sometimes so spot on, and others feels like a first draft of fanfiction??

Okay, confused. First, Alessi has 'light-denim' eyes, which I think is a not-too-hard to decipher code for blue; but then they're brown the next time H is thinking about them. And the kid, Preston. Isn't he like, 10?? But the father I read, the younger he speaks. Either he is going through rapid speech regression, or CM forgot how old she wrote him as at first. Either way, I'm seeing some inconsistencies....

Enjoying so far, despite the anxiety a story like this, involving a child, provokes. But I've run into my first practical issue. A therapist has labeled the child with selective mutism. Um, no. As someone who HAS that, no. Despite the terrible name, you don't choose when you're mute. It just comes & goes, due to anxiety/overstimulation. J's being manipulative, not mute, speaking whenever she wants to, just not to H.

Okay, this might seem like a minor issue, but as someone who has to fight their identity/orientation, this is important.

The kids in the GSA are introducing themselves, and one girl labels herself bisexual and asexual. She isn't two different sexual identities. She is an asexual with a biromantic orientation on top of it. Sexual and romantic orientations CAN be different. Just a note to the author....

You're all so stupid. Was this worth losing a baby over?? And what was 'this'? Stepping aside to let some thug be 'police' when everyone knows you coulda stopped him?? Should shoot the MF and get it over with. If you don't, someone else will die. Some people are too dangerous to let live. I don't care if that makes you think you're playing god; do it!

Okay, I'm confused. They were set. Taylor had the letter, they had the town on their side, all they needed to do was hold an election. But instead, they chose to step aside and let a wanna be rapist take over. WTF did they think would happen?? Instead of fighting it, you created a bigger problem. WTF are you gonna do now?? I'm so livid at that stupid move. Don't let criminals run the world after the apocolypse, yeah?

No, honey, it's good that you didn't! Sex while inebriated cannot be consented to, ESPECIALLY considering the situation. I'm glad you left! Don't regret it!

This style of writing is so good. I am hooked!

Also...I would have totally done what she just did. That was necessary and smart, and not murderous.

Okay, really? Biggest pet peeve in romance? Not. Using. Your. Words! Miscommunications happen, but many don't have to. When Gemma realized she hadn't responded to Skye the other night, that woulda been a good time for follow-through! And then, in the same scene, she realizes she didn't explain to Sky why they couldn't talk sooner, and it would've been so easy to backtrack and fix it. And she just..,doesn't. ....???

Apparently, I've a lot to gripe about. Let's start with the club scene happening. Just the idea that they had normal conversation in a club without yelling, especially while ON the dance floor...no. You're yelling or right in someone's ear. A surely wouldn't hear C 'growl'. Also, C thinks of A as a 'baby' when reasoning why she can't be attracted to her...I'm just wondering when a 3-year age gap became a problem.....

That's what it is! The format is off! None of the paragraphs are indented and everything is double-spaced. Was this a first novel, I wonder? I have read MM before, and I don't remember struggling so much with her other works.

Wait, who installed the lock?? Tha isn't clear, and it feels important. Depending on who did it, the meaning changes. Also, this isn't the first time I have wondered who said what or did what. Why is that not clearer??