mirabilos’s Reviews > Susan Bones and the Prisoner of Azkaban > Status Update

Got worse and worse over the last 100+ pages, but this now is… beyond rational explanation.

(And the author definitely has botched his timeline and forgot an entire year at Hogwarts.)

Behold, the feared “Veratiserum”[sic!]

Now the author expressed support for George Bush (the USA president), both of them. 🤯

Not entirely sure when this story switched from sixth to seventh year. I’m 95% certain the author just bollixed that up and forgot which year he was actually in.

Writing partly incoherent. Major lack of setting-appropriateness, the author has kids driving around and, by his own words, cannot even imagine cops *not* running around with guns. Plot… existent, but general direction vague, too much back and forth executed badly.

Maybe I'm building up a toleration.

The author has this on his profile:

I am defiantly annoyed by bad grammer.

Grammar is the difference between "Knowing You're Shit" &&& "Knowing Your Shit"

Maybe he should begin with his own stories? Just a thought… my *ahem* “toleration” for this is waning.

Someone doesn’t believe in interpunction…

"Oohhh!" Cedric stirred "Anyone get the number of that hippogryff?"

… or in spelling canon-typics words right. Or even English:

"NOOOOOOOOOOOOO!" cried Harry, horrified. "Lemme go! I wanna kill him!"

The boldest move, however, is to attribute his “writing” to JKR.

I see a DNF on the horizon.