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Jared
is 80% done
Ok so it’s def getting better. The incessant internal dialogue of questions from the FMC has finally slowed. The plot has interested me from the beginning but I kept getting taken out by the writing style and the dialogue.
— Jul 28, 2025 09:17AM
Jared
is 75% done
It’s getting better. That being said it’s soooo obvious to be from like the 1st 1/4 who The Guardian really is.
— Jul 27, 2025 09:49PM
Jared
is 35% done
Unpopular opinion it seems…but her inner dialogue being CONSTANT questions is annoying me. It seems like such a lazy way of writing to just have her listing question after question to herself CONSTANTLY. Also, it’s 1/3 of the way in and for the 4th time the ‘anyone else to pester?’ from Odessa and ‘not today.’ from the Guardian is repetitive as hell.
— Jul 26, 2025 05:44PM

