✨ tweety ✨’s Reviews > The Crown of Moonlight > Status Update

for when I write a review...
mostly every chapter is basically rinse and repeat:
- trip is interrupted by eating, sleeping or flora asking about the lore or one of the 'monsters' attacks them
- both want to jump the other but their mind says NOOoOO I CaNNOT They're MY Enemy!!
- there are no subplots, no recurring secondary characters, it's all flat as a board
- ah and they have no chemistry

looks like it's finally picking up...?!

I enter editor mode sorry. This whole chapter 16 could've been from flora's pov. Writing it from chyr's made is passive and detached. It makes the reader become even more less invested in what is happening. And in short, makes me want to stop reading.

ok, I've read enough and the verdict is that so far, i'm bored. the story is moving at a snail's pace and the mcs haven't showed much personality for me to care about them and their story. they seem too perfect and they are getting along too quickly!! bro nooo you should be enemies. I'm also confused about the sides

can't stop laughing at CULODUR bc they are two words in Italian and they mean backside (culo) and hard/tight (duro) so CULODUR in Italian would mean hard... ass basically lmao