Annika’s Reviews > Verity > Status Update

*7 consecutive "I (verb)" sentences
*5 instances of italics across 2 pages, three of which were inner monologue and was unnecessary.
*For all the bad, having Lowen empathize with Verity was a good call. She could have been outright jealous, but instead she hopes that Verity isn't suffering. Of course, she's more concerned about how HARD J's life is now, but still.
*With that being said, I hateeeee how Lowen sees her as a threat.
*Lowen realizes she needs water, which is so random to make its own line. The same thing happened last chapter and it only drew attention to itself. Having her suddenly feel parched after the interaction, either through a nervous gulp or the feeling of nausea would be a better way to get her out of the office.
*Two sentences end with "today" in close proximity
*Smut's gotta smut, and J's shirtless
*Lowen, your job is to be a ghostwriter, not to check in on Verity. Stop being nosey and stay in your lane!
*Verity feels like her kid stole her husband. YIKES. THERAPY. YESTERDAY
*Holy body image issues Batman. If you're so worried about losing your figure due to pregnancy maybe just... don't be? You clearly see having a child as a negative. Plus, her language makes it seems like she's considered an abortion but is only sticking with it because of J. Red flags galore
*So that whole chapter was setting up our reason to hate Verity. I don't hate her so much as I think she needs some serious help and to be single for a good chunk of time.

Also, as someone who doesn't want kids, this whole chapter was vilifying Verity over a completely reasonable desire. Don't love that. Not expressing it was a bad choice on her part, but that should've been a conversation before they got engaged.

Also also, clearly she miscarried because I don't think it was mentioned that her dead daughters were twins? So in that case, she "realized" the only way to get J to love her at all was to have his children. GROSS. And even if the girls were twins, she still had ANOTHER kid even after knowing how much she hated every part of it. All for J, I assume. :eyeroll: