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Crystal
is 78% done
The... accidentally saying you're in love during your narrative and then realizing it's true... cliché makes me extremely... extremely annoyed. And triggers my gag reflex. Will have to mark the whole thing down at least one point for that BS.
— Feb 18, 2017 01:28PM
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Crystal
is 66% done
Cyrus forgets Pickle a whole bunch.
I hope he and Blaze kill each other massively... no! wait! Gabe should kill them.
In general, I think a final, machete rewrite would have done wonders, hack it to death and sew up the pieces with a more believable set of sociopathic main characters.
— Feb 18, 2017 03:02AM
I hope he and Blaze kill each other massively... no! wait! Gabe should kill them.
In general, I think a final, machete rewrite would have done wonders, hack it to death and sew up the pieces with a more believable set of sociopathic main characters.
Crystal
is 30% done
I read a review that mentioned, "show, don't tell!"
and now I can't unsee it... constantly. Also, I am so sick of women being weak and helpless in fiction. Perhaps I need to do something about myself just in case the Zs attack.
— Feb 17, 2017 07:41AM
and now I can't unsee it... constantly. Also, I am so sick of women being weak and helpless in fiction. Perhaps I need to do something about myself just in case the Zs attack.
