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Neomeris
is 45% done
"He was not about to give up, and neither was Skarmor, so they pursued Draconex until dawn broke over the mountainside and gave shadows to the cluttered trees in the forest below."
This is the level of feeling and telling instead of showing of our big chase scene.
I already know my rating, but I'm debating whether to give an indie a 2 star or be kind and omit rating. What would you do?
— Mar 04, 2026 01:04AM
This is the level of feeling and telling instead of showing of our big chase scene.
I already know my rating, but I'm debating whether to give an indie a 2 star or be kind and omit rating. What would you do?
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Neomeris
is 90% done
"Jen instinctively shied away from the unwanted attention—but something inside smothered her fear, making her stand up a little straighter and face the onlookers with confidence."
If she's standing up straighter, she's not shying away! Literally! FFS, it's all like that!
Ok, it's almost over.
— Mar 04, 2026 03:19AM
If she's standing up straighter, she's not shying away! Literally! FFS, it's all like that!
Ok, it's almost over.
Neomeris
is 52% done
“Goooooooooooood . . .” Draconex whispered, letting the word drag out until he ran out of breath."
This is the most important minion again. Can you imagine how ridiculous it would look and sound in reality?
I'm starting to think it's ridiculous on purpose, because it doesn't make sense otherwise.
— Mar 04, 2026 01:18AM
This is the most important minion again. Can you imagine how ridiculous it would look and sound in reality?
I'm starting to think it's ridiculous on purpose, because it doesn't make sense otherwise.
Neomeris
is 51% done
“That chair is reserved for the Light Bringer of Merlin’s prophecy.” Jen was quiet for a moment. “I wish we could know who he or she is.”
Calling a second thing, this heralded hero will be MC. 1000000%
— Mar 04, 2026 01:13AM
Calling a second thing, this heralded hero will be MC. 1000000%
Neomeris
is 50% done
“Hey,” Jen said, sitting up straighter. “Don’t hate the sorceress, hate the magic.” “Oh, that’s good.” Gavin snickered."
Is it, is it really?
— Mar 04, 2026 01:11AM
Is it, is it really?
Neomeris
is 46% done
Anyway, calling it now, the amnesiac is her father, the cat is related to him and might be her mother.
— Mar 04, 2026 01:05AM
Neomeris
is 45% done
“I am Lord Draconex. Big fan.”
Why would the most important minion of our big bad, who 99% won't be active in this book, say lines as cheesy as this one? This is him speaking to the MC.
He may well be, but I'm not a fan. I wasn't scared or creeped out by him, he's quite generic, but now I'm actively cringing.
— Mar 04, 2026 01:02AM
Why would the most important minion of our big bad, who 99% won't be active in this book, say lines as cheesy as this one? This is him speaking to the MC.
He may well be, but I'm not a fan. I wasn't scared or creeped out by him, he's quite generic, but now I'm actively cringing.
Neomeris
is 20% done
“They already know that you are an omnimancer, so don’t be afraid to hold back."
Setting aside the names, 🤐, shouldn't she be ready to NOT hold back?
This doesn't make sense.
I was hoping I'd be supporting an indie author, instead I'm suffering through the book.
— Mar 02, 2026 06:10AM
Setting aside the names, 🤐, shouldn't she be ready to NOT hold back?
This doesn't make sense.
I was hoping I'd be supporting an indie author, instead I'm suffering through the book.
Neomeris
is 19% done
"Malcolm could only see the tip of Draconex’s nose, the only part of his face that was not enveloped in a shadow-filled abyss from the hood resting upon his head."
I'm sorry, but I'm 100% picturing Pinocchio and his long nose hidden under the hood.
That would at least make it fun.
— Mar 02, 2026 05:41AM
I'm sorry, but I'm 100% picturing Pinocchio and his long nose hidden under the hood.
That would at least make it fun.
Neomeris
is 14% done
“Ah, yes! El Tovar . . . thanks, sweetheart.” He put his hand in hers and squeezed. “They have the best sautéed duck breast.”
This is when mom&dad are telling the heroine, she's... Spoilers, adopted! In a book where we don't have detailed descriptions about locations, places, people (evil grin was a fun description). Too much detail when not needed.
— Mar 01, 2026 11:53PM
This is when mom&dad are telling the heroine, she's... Spoilers, adopted! In a book where we don't have detailed descriptions about locations, places, people (evil grin was a fun description). Too much detail when not needed.
Neomeris
is 7% done
But once she stood up, her right side split in hot agony. Yelling in pain, she crumpled to the floor and crawled back until she bumped into the back wall. “Who . . . who are you?” Jen stammered, still reeling from her blasting headache.
Girl, a headache is the least of your problems.
Why are we focusing on her headache? 😣
— Mar 01, 2026 08:43AM
Girl, a headache is the least of your problems.
Why are we focusing on her headache? 😣
