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Forever
is on page 60 of 900
The action scenes so far are fast paced but slow at the same time. I realized why! There’s a lot of telling going on and not a lot of showing. Idk if showing would help it but telling less definitely will! Every action is described in a fight scene.
Other than that I’m enjoying the story. Especially the dialogues I think they flow nicely. After the first 30 pages the writing flows much better.
— Mar 22, 2026 02:39PM
Other than that I’m enjoying the story. Especially the dialogues I think they flow nicely. After the first 30 pages the writing flows much better.
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Forever
is on page 104 of 900
Omfg I should’ve read the summary again before starting cuz I completely forgot Hansel the mc of the book. BRO WHY IS HE INTRODUCED IN THE THIRD CHAPTER?!? WHO INTRODUCES THE MC OF THE STORY IN THE THIRD CHAPTER OF THE STORY?!?
Anyway enjoying the story a lot. The writing could use some work there’s quite a few errors in the first 100 pages.
— Mar 22, 2026 09:17PM
Anyway enjoying the story a lot. The writing could use some work there’s quite a few errors in the first 100 pages.
Forever
is on page 34 of 900
Easy to read so far but there are some minor errors within the writing (Some extra words or letters). The info dumping felt a little out of place on page 11, but I like how it was done with the speech in some later pages.
— Mar 19, 2026 08:51PM
