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Sian
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I mean this is the nicest way possible but I can tell this is an indie debut.
Repeated dialogue, about 15 minor characters more than we need and the way the prose feels almost like it’s describing shots in a film rather than the flow of a scene for a novel - all these things would be caught by a good editor.
— 1 hour, 29 min ago
Repeated dialogue, about 15 minor characters more than we need and the way the prose feels almost like it’s describing shots in a film rather than the flow of a scene for a novel - all these things would be caught by a good editor.
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Sian
is on page 102 of 494
Okay the only female pov character is the MC’s sister who’s planning to run away with a soldier and is smitten with him.
Dialogue is noticeably clunky but I think the fight scenes are well written and I’m super interested in the world building/lore.
— 46 minutes ago
Dialogue is noticeably clunky but I think the fight scenes are well written and I’m super interested in the world building/lore.
Sian
is on page 15 of 494
About two woman have been introduced verses about 8 or 9 men… I don’t like those odds
— 3 hours, 36 min ago
